02.05.2014
Feyzanur Öztürk
Argumentative Essay 1
Should school provide moral education for youth,
or should instruction in values be left to parents?
Morals
consist of the good and the right things to be done. Children are not born with
the awareness of ethical behaviours. They should learn how they have to treat
from parents. While people say that school provide moral education for youth ,
instruction in values should be left to parents because the basis of moral
education begins in family, children learn easier and faster during the period between 0 – 6 years, if
instruction in value be left to school, moral education can’t provide exactly
for youth.
First of all, the basis of moral
education begins in family because a child first sees the light of day near his
family. They learn most of bad or good things from their parents so family
structure is significant for youth’s moral education. Children draw a moral map
by encoding information took from their family singly on their brain and they
apply the map in brain when they face an event. Children act upon moral
principles that are learnt by family in school age and school also keep on
providing moral education. The youth realize whether something is right or
wrong thanks to new information which they learnt. Although much more thighs
are taught in school, that children have the basis of moral education from
their parents is a crystal-clear fact.
Children learn easier and faster during
the period between 0 – 6 years. This period fall on time which is spent with
family before school. Children learn ethical rulers as well as basis behaviours
such as talking, walking and feeding. It is accepted that 0-6 age range is a
period which learning abilities are maximum by experts. According to Jean
Piaget’s moral development theory, moral values develop being parallel to
cognitive enhancement and occur in successive periods. In other words, if a
child doesn’t learn something at his mother's knee, in the future, that the
child accepts moral rulers and carries out is not be easy. Therefore, in this development process,
definite matters certainly have to be taught in definite period.
If instruction in value is left to
school, moral education can’t provide exactly for youth. There are people who
have different cultures but moral values are not different from each other in a
society. The youth can affect each other in a good or bad way. They can change their moral values learnt
from parents by behaviours which they observe from others. Consequently, there
is not a possibility that teachers concern every student one by one. Therefore,
moral education should provide in family. The youth should integrate these
information in school.
In summary, instruction in values should
be left to parents. If moral education is provided by parents, that school is
provided is quite difficult. You imagine that you try to build a structure
without basis. Both situations resemble each other. Instruction in value should
be left to parents. Otherwise, teachers can’t provide influentially moral
education as well school lessons because there are a lot of students who are
had to be interested. Even if teachers try to teach ethical behaviours, the
youth’s effective learning period is past. Family is building block of society.
Therefore, moral education should be provided by parents.
1) Children act upon moral principles that are learnt by family in school age and school also keep on (subject-verb agreement) providing moral education.
YanıtlaSil2) This period fall on (subject-verb agreement) time which is spent with family before school.
3) If instruction in value is left to school, moral education can’t provide (subject-verb agreement) exactly for youth.
1. if instruction in value be left to school (check this sentence. )
YanıtlaSil2. If instruction in value is left to school, moral education can’t provide exactly for youth. (you should support this sentence and I think there is smt. missing)
1) Please revise your title according to capitalization rules.
YanıtlaSil2) Children learn ethical rulers* as well as basis behaviours such as talking, walking and feeding : spelling mistake (2. body parag.)
2)Therefore, in this development process, definite matters certainly have to be taught (in definite) period : Spelling mistake .You should join them .(2. body parag.)
1-) In summary-> In sum sounds better ( conclusion paragraph, line 1)
YanıtlaSil2-) They should learn how they have to treat (" how they have to treat " sounds scary, doesn't it? use another modal form, please.) (paragraph 1, line 2)