23.04.2014
Feyzanur Öztürk
The Effects of Alcoholism
Alcohol is the main of additive
substances. Many people get used to drink alcohol and they can easily become
addicted. That is problem is called ‘Alcoholism’. Generally, people drink
alcohol to reduce depression, to fit in with the crowd or satisfy their
curiosity. People start to drink due to different reasons. Alcohol consumption
can cause major health problems, social problems, pecuniary loss and intangible
damages.
That alcohol causes health problems is one
of the major effects of alcoholism. Alcohol kills brain cells. People feel
relaxed when you drink alcohol. If they drink it a lot, it causes to augment
anxiety and depression. Other effects of alcoholism are not to think logically,
not to decide and to lose body balance. Alcohol leads to undermine memory
because of the fact that it kills brain cells. Moreover, it results in early
ageing and dotage. People who drink alcohol suffer from insomnia. Even if they
sleep a long time, they feel tired. Alcohol prevents to be absorbed vitamins
and other food and it causes gastric ulcer.
Alcohol which is a progressing disease causes
social problems. People who start to drink alcohol become addicted in time and
alcohol is the most important thing for him. Alcoholic people ignore all of
their responsibilities. They might lose their jobs due to this. They can start
to have problems with relationships. Some marriages end in divorce. Because
alcoholics lose their brain’s control, they can’t think consciously and they
are prone to crime.
Other effects of alcoholism are pecuniary
loss and intangible damages. Alcoholics waste their money for buying alcohol.
If their money is finished up, they try to find different ways such as gambling
or owing their friends. Later, they are on the hook because of financial
problems. Besides financial problems, there are moral damages. Especially, drinking
and driving can cause serious accidents. The more you drink, the more likely
you are to have an accident. Although, to drive with alcohol is dangerous and
ban, some people can’t respect this law and it causes traffic accidents which
include loss of life and property.
Consequently, the effects of alcoholism
which are health problems, social problems, pecuniary loss and intangible
damages can cause many problems that affect people’s life in all aspects.
Alcohol harms parts of body and kills brain cells. It causes other disorders
that affect your health. It also can cause depression or changes in behaviours that
result in problems with their family, friends, and with themselves. Alcohol is
not a solution and it results in permanent and dangerous situations.
1) Alcohol is the most important thing for him.(I didn't get who you mean by saying him. Revise this sentence.)(Paragraph 3)
YanıtlaSil2) Although, to drive with alcohol is dangerous and ban. (As 'ban' has only noun and verb forms, use a different adjective.) (Paragraph 4)
1) Even if they sleep (missing preposition) a long time, they feel tired.
YanıtlaSil2) Because alcoholics lose their brain’s (wrong structure) control, they can’t think consciously and they are prone to.
3) They can start to have problems with (wrong preposition) relationships.
1. Alcohol is the main of additive(missing letter) substances(paragraph 1)
YanıtlaSil2. They can start to have problems with relationships.(I think you should revise this sentence)(paragraph 3)
3. Although, to drive with alcohol is dangerous and ban(punctuation)(paragraph 4)
1-) Many people get used to drink alcohol and they can easily become addicted. (after "get used to" and "be used to", we use gerund)
YanıtlaSil2-) That is (article)problem is called ‘Alcoholism’.